X.S.E. #6 Comments

[brentlambert]

I've been waiting for this story ever since Gavin first let me know about it.

-Just as I'm a sucker for alternate realities, I'm a sucker for time travel and this issue has it.

-I feel sorry for any Magma fans going into this story because she got iced!

-Gavin's prose is definately improving. It's becoming more fluid and less stiff.

-Gavin wisely avoids the info dump in the first part of this futuristic tale.

-Score one for interconnectivity. Heather makes mention of her brother in this issue.

[gavin]

Thanks for taking the time to read and review Brent! I know you're an alt-world fan so I expected to have a bit more criticism on this front, but I'm happy with what you said. I agree that my prose has been difficult in the past but I really do think I'm becoming more free and less stiff as you've said, I'm allowing the characters and events to guide me. I myself am a Magma fan, and have always considered her to be the heart of the New Mutants which is why she was chosen - Domino turned on their own, the X-Men have turned on their own for survival and that was something I wanted to get across immediately. This isn't the X-Men Bishop has known, it's not even the X.S.E he knew in his own reality - this X-Men is only loyal to the healthy, and anyone else is dead weight but as we will learn - they aren't alone, and they aren't the only X-Men left. There is far more information in the second issue but that will likely be rewritten to reflect less information because I feel it's too much at once.

Sally and Heather are almost heading to Genosha at this point, and it's important that we understand Heather's character and her hesitance. I always found Lifeguard intriguing and have felt she is sorely underestimated, so to have this opportunity to develop her is something I love. We'll see two versions of her over the coming issues - Lifeguard in the main series, and Predator in the alt-world.

I hope you like what's to come!

GMM

[brentlambert]

Nov 12, 2011 8:38:10 GMT -5 gavin said:

Thanks for taking the time to read and review Brent! I know you're an alt-world fan so I expected to have a bit more criticism on this front, but I'm happy with what you said. I agree that my prose has been difficult in the past but I really do think I'm becoming more free and less stiff as you've said, I'm allowing the characters and events to guide me. I myself am a Magma fan, and have always considered her to be the heart of the New Mutants which is why she was chosen - Domino turned on their own, the X-Men have turned on their own for survival and that was something I wanted to get across immediately. This isn't the X-Men Bishop has known, it's not even the X.S.E he knew in his own reality - this X-Men is only loyal to the healthy, and anyone else is dead weight but as we will learn - they aren't alone, and they aren't the only X-Men left. There is far more information in the second issue but that will likely be rewritten to reflect less information because I feel it's too much at once.

Sally and Heather are almost heading to Genosha at this point, and it's important that we understand Heather's character and her hesitance. I always found Lifeguard intriguing and have felt she is sorely underestimated, so to have this opportunity to develop her is something I love. We'll see two versions of her over the coming issues - Lifeguard in the main series, and Predator in the alt-world.

I hope you like what's to come!

GMM

Well i'm def. interested to see where this timeline takes us. And you're probably right to hold off on unloading a bunch of information to the reader in the second issue. The slow and easy approach usually works best in these kinds of stories.