Post by brentlambert on Jun 25, 2009 14:12:00 GMT -5
New X-Men #1 by JD Mathis
THE GOOD: I like the fact that this roster isn’t an exact rip-off of Yost. We’re in fanfic people so let’s try to do something a bit different if we can please. No point in recycling what’s happening in regular Marvel IMO. Anyway the roster isn’t exactly mega powerful, but it’ll work better that way in the long run. Also I liked how you just cut to the chase with the powers of each character. It was a bit nifty and saved on potential headaches.
THE BAD: The first scene of this issue was just way too confusing. We needed some names in there for the robbers. Not everyone had to be named, but at least a couple to cut down on the confusion and repetition. If you’re going to have nameless characters abound be prepared to spice up the way you describe the people. Also Ms. White with a woman dressed in white? Man, please avoid clichés like this. I almost smacked my forehead when I read that. Tommy’s initial dialogue with Alani just kind of made me grind my teeth at parts. Like when he said “I wasn’t always on the side of angels”. That right there stuck out in my head as just totally unnecessary and it just felt unrealistic. They’re teenagers and the dialogue should reflect that. So these guys just charge off into battle because they were bored? Yea that sounds like some stupid shit that a youngin might do, but it wasn’t explained properly enough in the issue for me to buy it. And how the X-Men didn’t know that some of these kids were missing just didn’t fly with me. There should have been a scene somewhere in the issue depicting this.
OVERALL: I don’t want to seem as if I’m coming down too hard on this series because the actual writing itself isn’t half bad. But there needs to be some thought put into story logic. The W-H questions definitely need to be asked a lot more in plotting out future issues.
THE GOOD: I like the fact that this roster isn’t an exact rip-off of Yost. We’re in fanfic people so let’s try to do something a bit different if we can please. No point in recycling what’s happening in regular Marvel IMO. Anyway the roster isn’t exactly mega powerful, but it’ll work better that way in the long run. Also I liked how you just cut to the chase with the powers of each character. It was a bit nifty and saved on potential headaches.
THE BAD: The first scene of this issue was just way too confusing. We needed some names in there for the robbers. Not everyone had to be named, but at least a couple to cut down on the confusion and repetition. If you’re going to have nameless characters abound be prepared to spice up the way you describe the people. Also Ms. White with a woman dressed in white? Man, please avoid clichés like this. I almost smacked my forehead when I read that. Tommy’s initial dialogue with Alani just kind of made me grind my teeth at parts. Like when he said “I wasn’t always on the side of angels”. That right there stuck out in my head as just totally unnecessary and it just felt unrealistic. They’re teenagers and the dialogue should reflect that. So these guys just charge off into battle because they were bored? Yea that sounds like some stupid shit that a youngin might do, but it wasn’t explained properly enough in the issue for me to buy it. And how the X-Men didn’t know that some of these kids were missing just didn’t fly with me. There should have been a scene somewhere in the issue depicting this.
OVERALL: I don’t want to seem as if I’m coming down too hard on this series because the actual writing itself isn’t half bad. But there needs to be some thought put into story logic. The W-H questions definitely need to be asked a lot more in plotting out future issues.
